Review Detail of XOMatsumaeohana in Across Time and Space

Review Swap Valid till chapter 29 Writing Quality: • Typos: Chapter 1- Jiang Xiao Lang said(,) (") Of course, they're angry. - The () is what you missed out. • Chapter 5 - Ying Yi skill isn't, that bad -- (remove the comma) • Word usage Chapter 1- Instead of "won't happen" --> "wouldn't happen." --on that herbs ---> "on those herbs" -- so will them ---> "so will they." •Clarity: Avoid using "his" "her" she" "he" too much it starts sounding ranty. Try to avoid this and use the characters names. • Now the positives. The authors writing style isn't bad, aside from the few oddly worded sentences. The writing style flows well, there's a balance of description regarding character actions/ thoughts and feelings too. Story Development: The pace of the story is not bad at all, not too rushed or too slow. The first chunk of chapters show the female lead and male lead in the old world. Only on chapter twenty nine, (I do plan to read more since this story interests me) I want to learn more about the Princess at this stage in the story. 🤔 when will the transition or the separation happen? Character Development: 🤔🤔 Well I think the author could improve on this aspect. A lot of characters appear at the begining with no mini introduction. Chapter four you do explain who Han Zhengting is. But I wish you gave some more background information regarding the Princess. 😲 But the 👍 is the ML. I learn about him from the very start, I don't quite understand why he has such deep feelings for the FL though. Perhaps more background information on this. Also I want to know is there a reason the Princess name isn't mentioned, or maybe I missed it? World Background: I do think the author did a great job with the world background regarding the story. The setting and scene changes are written very well. I have an overview of the Empire in the first few chapters. The transition from the prologue (modern world) to the old world is good too. I didn't get confused. 4.6/5