I feel that you need to develop a little more the narrative, I understand what happens more or less. I feel that like I jump some chapter, and I review the previous chapter, and I see that I do not miss chapters and I get depressed because I did not understand very well what happened, in the current chapter. because you did not explain well what faith happened. In short, the MC went from point A to point D, and when you pasted through Point B you wrote it wrong or you did not write it at all and at point C, it is badly described, and there Point D is not very clear
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