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Review Detail of XOMatsumaeohana in She Will Be Mine

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XOMatsumaeohana
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Part of a review swap, (Chapter 13) (╥﹏╥) I regret reading this so quickly, and yes this story is very good. I'm definitely keeping this in my library. Writing Quality: The author mentioned that English isn't their strongest language. Regardless of this though, the overall flow of the story wasn't disrupted. Aside from a few minor errors with grammar. Perhaps a few paragraphs could have been broken down too. 4/5 Updates: Too soon to tell. Story Develooment: The pace is quite slow now, but that's only because this is the beginning chapters. I wonder how long until the truth regarding why Saya left Haru is revealed. Need story time for this, I'm guessing it will gradually be revealed. She left because she learned things about Haru - but who told her these things? right now I'm more focused on the romance than crime aspect, but it's interesting to see. Character Design: As of Chapter 13, I actually feel like we know more about Haru than Saya. Yes there's more background information on Saya so far. But it feels like Haru's character is more developed - for one, young master, bad temper - and yet is kind to the girl he loves. Only treats her well and nobody else. Saya, have yet to form a opinion other than her insecurity and focus on education. World Background: So far I'm not sure how the crime stuff is woven into the story, can't make the connection. But I do want to see more of it, how will this tie into the romance? Overall: 4.6/5 - You have a solid story here author, if you work on editing your chapters. Add more explanation and work on the FL character more then I guarantee this story will become better. Please keep up the good work.

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gotobell
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Aysel_Inara
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Oh! if you swapped with this, I'm sure it would be a good stuff XD