I have read many novels. Be it webnovel originals, fan-fics, or translated novels, but your novel is one of the utmost best I've read. From the character development, fight scenes, flow, comedy, romance, touching moments, and even the little details with the characters are all so well done. It may be a fan-fic, but it trumps almost all, if not all, that I've read so far. I'm truly pleased that I was able to stumble upon this gem of a story. Keep doing what you're doing. You are brilliant.

Gotta say I’m impressed by the story so far. The mc and the love interests play out well. The action scenes are short and need a little more polishing. As a new novel I feel like it’s sitting in a good spot right now.

I would never understand why this webnovel received 4.7/5.0 in reviews as it's not very good at all. The protagonist has no goal or no purpose of his own. The author just sways to the wishes of whatever the audience wants him to write. And the story so far seems to lack any real plot. If you still want to read it, then read it at your own risk.

When I first wrote this Fanfic, I had no clue how to properly pace and create a nice flow of a story. So I ended up with this trash heap. When I wrote chapter one I was half awake. It had no direction at all I just wanted to write something to cure my boredom and add a touch of creativity after or before my boring ass job. The end result was... The first volume is a ****ty mess. The second one was passable but had a lot of flaws. mainly being dragged on without a nice and steady flow. Some negative reviews you see here are mostly right. The first one being the MC changing his character to suit the situation. The scenes aren't described properly. It's mostly tell than showing, half of the scenes lack description and believability. The appearance of certain people we're abrupt and don't make sense. It's a straight up dumpster fire. Although it improved in time it's still in that limbo where I'm extremely unsatisfied. It became another rehashed sad past Harem boy who goes into another world bullcrap. That had small philsophy injected into it to make it feel mature and ****. And Apparently I use ellipses a lot. Like a **** ton. Volume two was where I got my groove on. Still feels lacking because it lacks punch. Some viewed it as boring, because of all the dragged on dialogues, But I found it a little more profound. Revealing character through dialogue. To each his own I guess. Near the end of the volume is where I found a steady pace of action and flow. From weeby Harem boy stardust crusader to an actual flawed character. The story I visualized was slowly taking shape. It was less of a Generic Harem Novel and more of the exploration of the human condition. A slightly unprofessional deconstruction of the harem genre. Also a far off vision of an extended universe. Then the vision was cut short. I got busier by the day took on more overtime. Got exhausted and quit my job. Got a new one slowed my pace down a little. Which eventually stopped me from churning more updates. Now a year later. I feel like I wanna give this one another try. Thanks for reading till the end. Hope you stick around to read the improved version.

Honestly it’s so-so... ARE YOU KIDDING ME ITS SO FUCKING GOOD WHY WOULD I AAY ITS SO-SO YOU RETARDS ITS REALLY GOOD... ok bye! Well ****... I can’t post this review because it doesn’t have enough words or something but anyways... Show me how those tits fart!

You use the "..." way too much, in a chapter you used it 35 times, 35 TIMES, basically every 2 lines. Some chapters start with a useless monologue about depression, killing and humanity for no reason, it's fine if you want a chapter that start like that, but you cant put it every 3 chapters; it became overused and annoying as it goes on. In volume 1, gluttont randomly appears for no fucking reason and story goes full retard. The most forced thing I have ever read. Characters and situation randomly appears because it's convenient. The story started good and it became a mess..

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A neat Mc with a tragic past. He has a good character in him and being with Neo is a bonus, and is kinda like best friend with Jaune. (The only thing that bothers me is the romance with Pyrrha, becase it looks like Mc and Neo were perfect for each other, but that’s my nitpick.) But so far it’s pretty good and are more developed then my own RWBY fan-fiction so keep up the good work and i will continue to read it. 😊😊😊

Yeah the novel is one of the best(the best) fan fic in the RWBY line. The plot and story has logic in it and the events are not nonsensical while the characters here are more alive? Or more personified? I forgot the term but what i meant is that the characters here dont seem too stupid as they still retain some logic when they are thinking and acting