Pretty damn amazing. Let me start with very small near nonexistent downsides, you should give a physical description for the characters like sometimes saying something like Sami touched the hairs that made up his goatee or something like that. Maybe you could say Oliver leaped but didn’t realize his 5’9 stature was to big to go through the door. Something to give a good description. Also start internal conflicts. Like maybe say that alyss was always scared around people because of such a tragic event. Other wise 👌🏾
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