Writing quality is basic, I started to binge read this and after awhile I saw nothing but forced ideas and contradictions of the main character. The grammar is bad but not too bad, there are a lot of misspellings that honestly make me think that the author is an eight year old. An example would be, "Think you." ??? Correction, it would be, "Thank you." Stability of updates, I honestly don't care. You write, you write. You post, you post. Story development is quite slow and shockingly when it's slow, it's still chaotic and all over the place. Reading this honestly seemed promising at first but it became a train wreck fast. Character design, I said earlier the mc is contradicting. A lot of characters are OOC. "Oreo," is honestly a pure question mark and sh*t stain of what the ****. World background? It's from Naruto and all you really have to do is follow the essential parts and not do some crazy sh*t because chances are, you're going to screw up. Very few can pull of crazy sh*t, you are definitely not one of them. Goodluck, hopefully one day you can write something better and I might see it.
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Welp thanks for the review. Sorry it didnt meet your standards. The grammar I can only do so much since I mostly write from my phone and any time I reopen it will scan and change words. 😅 Thanks for reading what you have read. I will continue to write still and continue to improve. Lost my editor so it's just me again. Hope I get a chance to read what you write to gain some ideas.
Didn’t make any sense you could have had a good story but I don’t know
