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2019-03-07 12:13

Writing Quality and Updates are fine Story Development was fine at first, then declined The reason the Story Development declined is due to the terrible Character Design and the lack of World Background Things started to go downhill after the rescue, on the way to the capital When he left the castle it just became terrible

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