Review Detail of yunisao in Pinnacles' Edge

The first chapter definitely hooks you in. The concept and ideas behind the story is great but I think the writing could be improve. I really like how the fl is conveyed as intelligent but as a character she isn’t as fleshed out. And I think its due to the transitions of events. There not properly transitioned so the flow is bit awkward *spoilers* *Like for example when she escapes*. Overall its an enjoyable read :)