Review Detail of DragonTreasures in Pinnacles' Edge

I like how you grew from the first chapter to the last chapter! You need to work on formatting your dialog so it's easier to read, even though you improved by the 23rd chapter. Basically, if a new person talks skip a line, and if you have details after dialog about the person talking, keep it on that line. Other than that, I think the more you write the more you will keep improving, and I hope you keep putting in lots of effort, and find inspiration in all the stories you read!