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Fantasyst
FantasystLv66yr
2019-02-19 19:55

The story has a good start, but you need to make lance more motivated to get stronger. in addition, in order to make it easier for you to define his power you could make his last wish to be the gamer ability, he will be able to view stats, do quests, get items drops form monster killed and you can even add a shop window with items from other worlds. i think this will make the story more interesting.

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