Review Detail of Mordorlandia in Convincing her (Jen and Lucas)
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Dear author, It's a very good story. I like the fluffy, heart-filled, poppy atmosphere between the two main characters. However, I cannot give it a full 5.0 because of 2 reasons that I hope does not come as offensive to you: 1. There's a good amount of grammatical errors that it does sidetrack me every now and then. Luckily, the she/he context is still consistent unlike most translated novels I've read out there. 2. So far, the story is very light. There's not much angst going on between the two characters. To put it simply, this is the most light-hearted novel I've ever read so far. It's a good thing but it's also bad because I want to see some friction between the two before adding in other couples into the mix. Again, I'm still very early in the novel. I haven't reached chapter 50 yet, so I will update and maybe erase this comment. For now, this is my opinion. Still, I love it. Do not stop writing. I am looking forward to your new works.
Convincing her (Jen and Lucas)
PinkCotton
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Thanks for the review, tbh this is the first book I've ever committed myself to writing and I know there is a ton of grammatical errors in the beginning. Unfortunately, I've become so busy with life that I haven't really had time to go back and revise the old chapters. I was also aiming for this being light-hearted, I know it may not be a lot of people's cup of tea but that was my mentality and goal when I started writing it. If I add anything too heavy at this point it'll feel too forced, at least to me. Thank you for the review, I plan to explore different genres in the future so my future works are going to be different from this one. đ¤
Ah, I completely understand. It's hard to deviate once you're already far entrenched into the story. If you change it, it'll feel out of character and throw the whole setting out of the loop. For a first book, it's successful. Kudos. Good luck with life and I hope that writing continues to be a source of inspiration and relaxation for you.
PinkCotton:Thanks for the review, tbh this is the first book I've ever committed myself to writing and I know there is a ton of grammatical errors in the beginning. Unfortunately, I've become so busy with life that I haven't really had time to go back and revise the old chapters. I was also aiming for this being light-hearted, I know it may not be a lot of people's cup of tea but that was my mentality and goal when I started writing it. If I add anything too heavy at this point it'll feel too forced, at least to me. Thank you for the review, I plan to explore different genres in the future so my future works are going to be different from this one. đ¤