Review Detail of Bara_Kona in Glory Seeker

So far it's great, there is variety in the characters and their attitudes. When it comes to dialogue you nailed it , well done! The pacing is good and I like the mischievous attitude of the MC. I was a bit confused by the setting of the story, you use modern terms like Japan, but then also fantasy place names, but I'm sure I will understand as I keep reading. There were some gramatical issues here and there such as using the wrong tenses. In some places you would write "the boys name is" when writing in past tense. I also noticed an abundance of adjectives that were not necessarily useful, which is something I struggle with myself. For example scarlet red/ strict authority. (Scarlet is red therefore the red is unnecessary) Otherwise great work. I look forward to seeing your improvement.