Review Detail of MuddyEarth in The Flames of Darkness (Old)

First impression I got was, "It's a second person POV!" which is very unique these days. World background is good and the story was very easy to follow so far, it has potential if the story progression can keep up with the current phase. If only the author could improve his editorial styles, this could be more enjoyable. (By the time this review was posted) The author need to pay attentions on line spacings and need to use quotations for dialogues to increase the readability.