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MotuoLv155yr
2019-03-10 01:37

First I need to say that it's mischievous of you to create more Asian boy dreams in the heads of the poor girls that will fall prey to your story. I'm kidding. Writing quality is pretty good. Some mistakes here and there that can be corrected with a bit of editing, but nothing that prevents my ability to enjoy the story. The story progresses steadily, and the beginning can easily be related to (I can relate). So far, the main character is compelling, but I don't have much to say about world background at the moment (then again I'm a sucker for fantasy, so I'm probably biased). It's a bit soon for me to judge the plot, but I believe your story has a lot of potential for those interested in romance fiction. (like me :D) Best of luck!

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Thank you so much for your review, im working on re reading and making correction as l go along. Thank you for keeping an open mind

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