Review Detail of Book_Keeper in Runes of Hecate
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Hello, your novel has been assessed and review by Virtual Bookshelf. A review excerpt is as follows: Technical: Punctuation and grammar is on point. Just a few technical errors that can fixed with basic proofreading such as, “It was good that Klaud didn't press further.” - misspelling of Klaus. Prologue: This sets up Aeon’s love and interest in magic as well as the basic idea of this world. Not the most interesting starter, but it’s clear and does it’s job of setting up the story. Technical note: the Dad’s story to his son doesn’t need to have each sentence as a new line/paragraph. The subjects should be grouped into a form like this (ellipses to shorten the text): "A long, long time ago…the five elements. "However, … Magic, Hecate. "She took pity …. vitality! "Shortly after, … one of the elements. "That, my boy, is the origin of magic." Characters: Aeon, Suri, Korona - Their first fight together is way, way too long. Even though you did a great job of all the little actions and details, it simply prolonged for too long across about 10 chapters. And even after this, all their adventures together mainly consist of very long fights or class-material explanations and discoveries. Montis, Klaus, Bell, Rigel, Levi, Dan, Doru, Gavin, Mark, Samuel, Selena, Harold - Except for the main 3 along with Levi and Klaus, there are too many characters to keep track of with little differentiation between them that would grant them particularly memorable or unique. Some are mentioned again in later events like Mark and Dan, but generally it feels like the characters filled in a certain role and then didn’t have any later importance. .........(cont.) The full review is linked to your title on: https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/02/02/webnovel-assessments-10/ After three chapters, you may request to be assessed again. Thank you, and the best of luck on your writing endeavors! :)
Runes of Hecate
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Thanks! I don't need to say too much because you clearly know what you are talking about :joy: especially because you stated that the novel is judged whether it could potentially be published or not. You're right. Currently I'm a one-man show, but this would change later on :D Also, i would be doing a comprehensive review after the first volume. I'll be editing every single chapter from prologue to the volume 1 end. Of course, without changing its essence. I do agree that there are too many characters, but, rest assured, those people that I have touched upon will be important in the future chapters. I can't reveal anything, so I can't delve much deeper into this. No direction... I agree. It's all a big question mark. The same reason being that the novel is still too short. It's still 6% or less of the entire story. Naturally, I have my mistakes as the author. This is still my first novel after all. So thank you for taking the time to give your honest review :D I will be asking for a review again in the futute :D
Glad to hear it was of help! Yes, the imperfection of the review lies in the incompleteness of the story. But rest assured, it will take on a greater shape with continual refining. As any writer, editor, or english teacher would say: Revise, revise, revise! Keep at it~! :)
yoursexypotato:Thanks! I don't need to say too much because you clearly know what you are talking about :joy: especially because you stated that the novel is judged whether it could potentially be published or not. You're right. Currently I'm a one-man show, but this would change later on :D Also, i would be doing a comprehensive review after the first volume. I'll be editing every single chapter from prologue to the volume 1 end. Of course, without changing its essence. I do agree that there are too many characters, but, rest assured, those people that I have touched upon will be important in the future chapters. I can't reveal anything, so I can't delve much deeper into this. No direction... I agree. It's all a big question mark. The same reason being that the novel is still too short. It's still 6% or less of the entire story. Naturally, I have my mistakes as the author. This is still my first novel after all. So thank you for taking the time to give your honest review :D I will be asking for a review again in the futute :D
Glad to hear it was of help! Yes, the imperfection of the review lies in the incompleteness of the story. But rest assured, it will take on a greater shape with continual refining. As any writer, editor, or english teacher would say: Revise, revise, revise! Keep at it~! :)
yoursexypotato:Thanks! I don't need to say too much because you clearly know what you are talking about :joy: especially because you stated that the novel is judged whether it could potentially be published or not. You're right. Currently I'm a one-man show, but this would change later on :D Also, i would be doing a comprehensive review after the first volume. I'll be editing every single chapter from prologue to the volume 1 end. Of course, without changing its essence. I do agree that there are too many characters, but, rest assured, those people that I have touched upon will be important in the future chapters. I can't reveal anything, so I can't delve much deeper into this. No direction... I agree. It's all a big question mark. The same reason being that the novel is still too short. It's still 6% or less of the entire story. Naturally, I have my mistakes as the author. This is still my first novel after all. So thank you for taking the time to give your honest review :D I will be asking for a review again in the futute :D
Glad to hear it was of help! Yes, the imperfection of the review lies in the incompleteness of the story. But rest assured, it will take on a greater shape with continual refining. As any writer, editor, or english teacher would say: Revise, revise, revise! Keep at it~! :)
yoursexypotato:Thanks! I don't need to say too much because you clearly know what you are talking about :joy: especially because you stated that the novel is judged whether it could potentially be published or not. You're right. Currently I'm a one-man show, but this would change later on :D Also, i would be doing a comprehensive review after the first volume. I'll be editing every single chapter from prologue to the volume 1 end. Of course, without changing its essence. I do agree that there are too many characters, but, rest assured, those people that I have touched upon will be important in the future chapters. I can't reveal anything, so I can't delve much deeper into this. No direction... I agree. It's all a big question mark. The same reason being that the novel is still too short. It's still 6% or less of the entire story. Naturally, I have my mistakes as the author. This is still my first novel after all. So thank you for taking the time to give your honest review :D I will be asking for a review again in the futute :D