Look if you are going to make a tragedy you should have made the MC do something about it .if not just make him someone with no back story . you can't have his sister and niece raped and he doesn't do anything to those rapists . It makes him look like a idiotic ***** . Just make him die killing them or use one wish to torcher them. Your summary was good but I was disgusted by his behaviour of cursing the god or something when he could have just used the wishes to kill or torcher them , he didn't even try . Think of it as constrictive critisism don't stop writing and just change the backstory and make it better I'll change my rating. I'm also a fan of the LN and want to read your story......
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You forgot to mention the grammar... it is like trying a Chinese novel using Google translator but worse π¨
I am gonna change somethingβs about the backstory, gonna update in about 2 hours. Also about the grammar i will look for someway to get grammarly to work on my devices. Havenβt been able to till now.
