Review Detail of Sinfish in Draga of the Vanguard

Let me give a concrete example: Introduction of a character in Library of Heaven's Path, the #2 novel on this site: ""Zhang Xuan raised his head and a plump man whose face was full of fats came into view. This fellow at least weighed 300 to 400 kilogram. From afar, he looked like a giant ball of meat. “Qian Biao!” A name floated from the depths of his memories. This Qian Biao was one of the teachers in charge of logistics. He was a very spiteful man who always liked to eat into the spare change of others. As the teacher on the lowest level, Zhang Xuan’s salary had been minute and the resources he could claim had always been minimal. Thus, he had never been respected by him. Due to this affair, he offended him. The moment they met, all kinds of sarcasm and insults would come flying out. Previously, Zhang Xuan being given four identity tokens under the premise that he wouldn’t finish it was the work of this man. “I have finished using my identity tokens. I would like to claim a few more of them!” Couldn’t be bothered with the other party, Zhang Xuan spoke calmly. “Finished using it?” Qian Biao stunned for a moment before howling in laughter. “Haha, everyone, come and take a look. This teacher who is first from the bottom comes here to brag that he has used up all of his identity tokens! Haha, this is the funniest joke I have heard in the entire world…”" Introduction of a character in your novel: ""Sir, the battle report." said a plump man of average height, with dark yellow laid back hair complimenting his light cream skin and a pronounced moustache adorned his face. He presented a pile of documents to a man sitting on a golden chair with a shield engraved in it. This man was clearly past his prime, with a full head of white hair and disinterested green eyes. He was taller than the plump man addressing him, and sported white armor with a white cape. This man sat on his well carved golden throne, clearly bored out of his mind. The plump noble currently addressing this man wad Felt Grande, the Viscount that had handled the Viel survivors. "It's a mystery why Baron Chebou didn't deliver it himself, but they are indeed documents containing information about the battle." said a young man as he snatched away the documents from Felt. This young slender man wearing silver armor and standing above Felt, wore a cheeky grin Coupled with his black hair and slanted eyes, he gave the inpression of a psychopath. "They were victorious. The 'Fog Giant' was defeated. Apparently, the mysterious fog was none other than extremely hot steam with salt." said the young man. "And...Oh! Here's some news. A Dragã beat it."" Both these introductions are roughly the same length of characters and words.

You made a Solid point. I'll be sure to implement ot