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Chryiss
ChryissLv55yr
2019-03-20 18:07

Writing: 3 A lot of proofreading needs to be done concerning punctuation and grammar. Updates: 5 5 chapters as a start is fine. It’s too early to judge frequency of updates. Story: 3 The story is progressing at a fairly good pace, but a lot of details along the way are missing to complete gaps such as more of Lia’s backstory and previous life and hardships as well as the society they live in and how the school comes into play. Character: 4 Except for the 14 languages, Lia is a good character! She has spunk and personality. The brief moment with the mother is good, but a lot more could be done with her and well as Rita and all the other characters so far. World: 3 More detail and settings and the society need to be filled in. The only gist we get is poor loving situation to school. That’s not nearly enough world information; additionally, both should be expanded upon more. Overall: 3.6 You’ve got the basics of an engaging story down! Now it just needs some polishing and fleshing out!

THE RUTHLESS LOVE

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Thx a lot !! For your review !! It is a great help

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Loveleen_Sabharwal
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Honestly i found this story randomly going through webnovel and thought to give it a try but i would say it was worth it totally. The best thing is how the female lead Lia is not the meek girl who after going through so much would sit in the corner crying waiting for her knight in shining armour but instead she proves the fact that "what doesn't kill you makes you stronger "..... Mike is an interesting character too... Though it do need some editing because of little bit spelling mistakes and grammar but it is very much understandable and you can definitely relate to it. Give it a try for sure....

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Pretty_Sunflower
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Reveal spoiler

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Kapschopra
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This an amazing story I indeed love reading it.........the plot is really worth reading.....thumbs up to the writer Rachel you are doing it greatly but please update frequently. Wish you luck for future n lots of love......:)

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Daoist118962
Daoist118962Lv1

It's a little romantic and actions chanting inside it Her answers in what basis she should be qualified for Queen's crown was marvelous Her way of answering can defeat anybody's fakeness Well done This was really very good

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Muchezli
MuchezliLv5

Will Mike know her identity Will she know Mike's identity Can both of them when they find out be able to overcome the familes' old grudge? Hope the party goes well for Lia/ Lilith/Lily

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Kapschopra
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Hey Rachel I'm loving your work........you are making the story all the more interesting..........your plot is amazing.....i love reading yoir stufff and ya that new cover is fab....keep going...:)

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Nzoputa
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This is a great story. Although the author needs to work on some things like punctuation, and sentence construction. But its still a good story, the story line covers for the errors.

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