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Review Detail of Chryiss in Honey : The Empire's Treasure

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Chryiss
ChryissLv51yrChryiss

Oh hey, first review! Writing Quality: 2.5 The grammar is consistently incorrect, and misspellings are not uncommon. However, it is structured well enough that the content is understandable, and as someone who honestly got engrossed in the storyline, I got used to/self corrected the errors. The writing could benefit from longer sentences that are more detailed with greater vocabulary range as sometimes it feel staccato. Stability of Updating: 5 I started when there were about 50 some chapters available, and since then, itself updated every day or other day, so that’s a good release schedule to me. Story Development: 5 Even though I can’t get over the injustices of the MC, those injustices look like they’re well on their way to being resolved. This really gripped me into the story. The apocalyptic Earth to a fantasy is rather interesting! The sudden drop of the Earth story felt a little odd, but I was compelled by the events in the fantasy world, so it wasn’t a problem. I only hope, and think it will, that the two worlds will connect later; otherwise, the long writing on the Earth world would be pointless. Author also goes into some minor descriptive details which makes reading nicer and more imaginable. Character Design: 3.5 MC and fantasy mother are great characters and are developed and designed well. Other characters that have potential but aren’t on these two’s levels are the commander/captain, secretary, and fantasy father (he’s the closest to getting there though). The rest are the typical antagonist tropes. World Background: 4 I think the worlds are explained well with their own history/backstory and current issues in the world. There are a few minor inconsistencies or gaps, but they can easily fixed or filled in later. Overall: 4

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Honey : The Empire's Treasure

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Chryiss
ChryissLv5Chryiss

And of course I mistyped~ *feels staccato *it has updated

mountwolf89
mountwolf89Authormountwolf89

Thank you for the review. I will definitely try to work harder on my grammar and spelling.

Lazareth
LazarethLv4Lazareth

Omg, I think I just fell in love. Only because you used the word staccato. The context was perfect. I also just love the way you write. About to read one of your novels based on your review alone.

Chryiss
ChryissLv5Chryiss

Oh hi there. Thanks lol~ XD Yeah, I like using sound/musical-based words when describing things sometimes. I have 3 novels, but the only one I consider that's written well is Canaan. >u< The other two were contest submissions that I continued instead of dropping after the contest ended. Just as fyi if you do decide to read one~ (:

Lazareth:Omg, I think I just fell in love. Only because you used the word staccato. The context was perfect. I also just love the way you write. About to read one of your novels based on your review alone.