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das_weq
das_weqLv24yr
2020-04-03 03:07

The beginning of the story resembles a kids writing, world background doesn't really make sense, the usual cliche antagonists who are sick in the head or suffered severe trauma. Redundant sentences for word count etc. Still an ok read if u can skim through it and ignore the grammar as it's not the author first languge. There is a gradual increase in quality of writing if you continue long enough.Read when you have nothing else

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Ripcorez
RipcorezAuthor

Thanks For The review! I agree with you about the writing in the first few chapters resembling a child's writing, this is my first time writing something like this. I just said yolo and wrote the first chapter haha. Anyways, I thank you for your honest opinion, I will try even more to improve my writing but I do recommend reading a bit further to get the world-building part. From what WN shows me, You've only read 4 chapters and already complain that the world background makes no sense. Well, thanks for reading anyways and stay safe in these times!

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Well this is an interesting book to say. Writing quality is a bit mess at the initial chapters that's to say, and the author seems to improve his skills and that what a reader should expect from him, as not all are professionals and they are learning and not all have english as their first language to begin with. Stability of the update was poor as our author took a break before but right now it seems good and I hope author could continue the same pace. Caught up with the ch58 you know, cliffs are the things I hate, plz update next πŸ™Œ Story development is interesting, can't guess Mc'S character, some times a cool killer, while other times a helping saint. Character design, this is a thing which was a tough thing to discern, as it was equally good at some point, and irritating as other, but still it's a good one compared to the new novels released In our webnovel. World back ground, still waiting excitedly to see what author is going to unfold, guess it's exiting to see where the story will end but at this point it's going well like some traditional cultivation novels to there's nothing to fred on. Over all its a worth reading book! Hope author could release a bunch of bonuses, some times and entertain us readers! Let the study have 300+ chapters and make it a great hit! And thanks for author to keep writing the novel without abandoning it despite he had once to take a long break before re continuing πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ™ŒπŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘

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