Review Detail of protocenturian in Tales of the Machine God

The author here with a totally biased review I've wanted to start consistently writing a story for a while now, so I'm trying to use this as a way to motivate me to not only write more but also improve on things such as grammar and style. I'll be trying to get this story posted at least once a week and with a goal of 1000 words for a page from now on. So thanks to those who stick around to see me fling myself at writing and hope I hit a bullseye.