Review Detail of ArdentAngel in The Two Lives Of Aaron Wade: The Gamer & The Heir
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I normally LOVE criticizing novels! Hell, there was a time I was criticized for being too harsh to the authors due to my critiques! But hell if I don't love this story … A BEAUTIFUL execution of a new premise in a story, no overused reincarnation/transmigration/back-in-time or anything of the sort. A child inheriting his grandfather's empire while having to fight for his rights with his other family members (father, mother, brothers) be it in real life or in a VR game. I normally write reviews either due to disappointment (unfortunately, on this site, this is the most prevalent review one can expect from) or potential of the story (normally due to writing quality being really bad, but its premise being way too great to ignore). Guess what, this story falls under NEITHER. It's got AWESOME characters, world background and story development (at least for now) and stability of updates seems to be on a daily release (again, for now). Writing quality is also really nice; it has nicely split paragraphs and very good sentences' structures. Rich enough vocabulary and grammar is pretty nice. The only critique the author still has to work on (for now) is proper tenses usage. He messes them up from time to time, but it is NOWHERE NEAR the mix-up most other novels on this site have. Unfortunately, due to me being me, that still warrants one less star on `Writing Quality`, making it a total of 4. Other than that? It's 5 star for now! Making the overall rating a 4.8. Cheers.
The Two Lives Of Aaron Wade: The Gamer & The Heir
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Thanks for your honest review and for being such a good reader. As for my tenses.........both my spoken and written English was self taught from movies and novels. Though I live in an English speaking country, it's mostly dominated by either tribal languages or an offshoot of the English language called pidgin. I learnt from writing, and I really have no idea how to properly structure my tenses and all that. I've just been trying my best and learning from my readers. Please don't hesitate to give me any advice you have. Thanks
I'm not a native either. I don't even live in a country that speaks it. :P Tenses you learn with time and experience. And a bit by reading actual books (as in books from a store, which are supposed to be 100% grammatically correct). But the most I learnt is actually writing my own story as well, so don't worry about it and take your time. For a quick cheat-sheet, I'd recommend this: *** . teachingenglish . org . uk/blogs/vmahendiran/where-use-which-tense (Just remember to remove all the spaces surrounding the dots) Pay special attention to 1-8 (in my opinion), and then you can read some more about each individual tense on your own… Just google it up a bit. But as I said, it ain't terrible. You got most of it right, actually (especially in the last chapter, at least I don't remember any specially glaring there), so you don't have to be too hung up on it. I began by writing whichever tense I `felt` was right (I was correct ~90% of the time) and only with time did I incorporate actual theory and began thinking which tense to use where. I honestly just imagine all the tenses as a timeline and select from there (it's why I sent you this link, the easiest way to build the timeline, without too much research - if you know each individual tense). :P
ArdentAngel:I'm not a native either. I don't even live in a country that speaks it. :P Tenses you learn with time and experience. And a bit by reading actual books (as in books from a store, which are supposed to be 100% grammatically correct). But the most I learnt is actually writing my own story as well, so don't worry about it and take your time. For a quick cheat-sheet, I'd recommend this: *** . teachingenglish . org . uk/blogs/vmahendiran/where-use-which-tense (Just remember to remove all the spaces surrounding the dots) Pay special attention to 1-8 (in my opinion), and then you can read some more about each individual tense on your own… Just google it up a bit. But as I said, it ain't terrible. You got most of it right, actually (especially in the last chapter, at least I don't remember any specially glaring there), so you don't have to be too hung up on it. I began by writing whichever tense I `felt` was right (I was correct ~90% of the time) and only with time did I incorporate actual theory and began thinking which tense to use where. I honestly just imagine all the tenses as a timeline and select from there (it's why I sent you this link, the easiest way to build the timeline, without too much research - if you know each individual tense). :P
ArdentAngel:I'm not a native either. I don't even live in a country that speaks it. :P Tenses you learn with time and experience. And a bit by reading actual books (as in books from a store, which are supposed to be 100% grammatically correct). But the most I learnt is actually writing my own story as well, so don't worry about it and take your time. For a quick cheat-sheet, I'd recommend this: *** . teachingenglish . org . uk/blogs/vmahendiran/where-use-which-tense (Just remember to remove all the spaces surrounding the dots) Pay special attention to 1-8 (in my opinion), and then you can read some more about each individual tense on your own… Just google it up a bit. But as I said, it ain't terrible. You got most of it right, actually (especially in the last chapter, at least I don't remember any specially glaring there), so you don't have to be too hung up on it. I began by writing whichever tense I `felt` was right (I was correct ~90% of the time) and only with time did I incorporate actual theory and began thinking which tense to use where. I honestly just imagine all the tenses as a timeline and select from there (it's why I sent you this link, the easiest way to build the timeline, without too much research - if you know each individual tense). :P