Review Detail of TheBigSister in There's Always A Catch

Hello! My very first story. There's got to be a lot of mistakes that I can't see: confusing perspectives perhaps, punctuation? Since it's better to get outside perspective on things like these, I posted it here and other sites. So please don't hold back on your review/constructive criticisms if ever you have the time to read through it. And I'm shameless enough to give a 5 star review because why not? :D Otherwise, hope you enjoy!