I’m gonna be honest here, I know my grammar is bad but dang, you beat me to it. Your lack of comas are uncountable, don’t get me wrong, your English is good it’s just your lack of comas is fcking me over. Another thing that was a turn off for me was Jax character, he’s too emotional for me. I’m not saying he’s bad, he’s actually good it’s just me being weird and like having a calm mc that can’t be triggered easily. As for the story, it’s amazing, there’s only a few of us who writes seven sins ffc so I hope you don’t drop this, and please don’t do harem if you’re not confident on doing it right.
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