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Hello, this is my review until the current chapter: 😚 Writing: it's good if you watch your grammar correctly. Mix of past and present tense. Don't forget to use past tense. Don't worry I still can understand but for OCD native english speaker, perhaps their eyes will burn. 3 stars. You can reedit it later. Stability update: because it's still early to judge. 4 stars Story developments: It's getting exciting through more chapters. Keep it up. 4 stars. Characters: Just an advice. Research more about yakuza. I don't know if this story only popped out from your head suddenly or you had been plan this through before. If you did, then add more spice into it. 4 World background: It's in Japan.So, Yes. もちろん、大好きあははははは. You can add more detail on it too kay. 4 stars. Overall it was a good read. Keep improving with your writing. I want you to not satisfied easily. For myself I never been satisfied with my own novel. That's why I want to keep learning. Best of luck to you and I hope you do not abandoned the story. Good day

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One Tear In A Flower

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Thank you! I'll consider everything you've pointed out❤️