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This review is part of a review swap and valid as of chapter six. Reincarnatation fantasy in another world. So far so cliché. A full dozen sent into fantasy land made me blink. All of them dropping from just shy of twenty years old into kindergarten bodies made me blink twice. And then there was the gory part. Let's just say the kids were changed -- by people who'd make Doctor Frankensten wonder if they were sane. And that's about it. There's a short arc where they escape from abuse, live through initial training in safety and embark upon their first adventure. The story is written in mutiple third person point of view in past tense. So for the stars. Writing: Shaky English, undisciplined use of tenses, some pure errors and quite a few odd constructions which, while grammatically correct still are non-standard English, detracts from the reading experience. Three stars. Updates. Six chapters. Too little to use as reference. Still no reason to complain. Five stars. Story. The beginning runs its course as expected. The delivery is somewhat uneven from a pacing poing of view. Four stars. Characters. There's a bloody dozen of them, plus supporting cast, and several of them already have distinct personalities. Five stars. World. Made for the story. Looks fine this far, but it's still very early in the story. I'll hand out the full five stars for now.