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2019-04-25 20:31

[Sorry for the Long Review and I hope you read this for the future developments...(p^ェ^q)] I want to Congratulate the author to her other Novels and I hope this novel got continue!! This has A Great Potential and I've read the other novels you've written and their amazing!! Your Writing Quality is 4 Stars 🌟 🌟 🌟 🌟 because I feel you need to deepen the other Meaning of the words you use... But I'm satisfied to this work cuz the characters have a solid depths of meaning to the readers !!! The Story Development is amazing cuz your characters are well explained and the story had a stable foundations for future storyline you have think off... And I hope you continue this foundation ♥ The Character Design is Amazing but I think the Female Lead needs to be more cold to the Male Lead because the ML is so disgusting that I want to bash his head to the wall cuz of the things he do to their child... The Child death is because of his own stupidity... I want the FL to distance herself and child to him because if im the FL I will leave him alone and not comeback because I fear he will do it again( if im the FL that reincarnated)( i wish this to happen if possible) (๑・ω-)~♥ The World Background is not so great because you have not explained in details/describe yet what world she's living now , and what country she's servicing ... [I hope you fix the faults i have found and sorry for the offense I've said but this is for the better development if your story and other Novel... (。・ω・。) and so sorry for the wrong grammar that I've created...]

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