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2019-05-06 04:53

I really like this story. It captures your attention when you first begin it. The only thing is the chapters are pretty short, maybe you should try to lengthen them or combine them. Also you don't go into detail about the surroundings. There just isn't that much details, but oddly enough it works with your style of writing. Also it is 12 chapters in and we still haven't met the ML... I thought this was a romance?

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