Review Detail of LittleKoi in Transition and Restart
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This is part of a review swap: Description of the characters are very well done, the overall quality is very good, except some sentence I found hard to understand for English commoners. The action and feelings of the different characters are well detailed. I found the world background description was a little lacking from the rest. The first chapter is hard to understand maybe you should add more things to be sure people understand well what is happening, because I saw another guy saying the same thing. Anyway It is nice, good work!!
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Heh :D Yep the confusion is a dilemma. The first version started with Ulf going green Hulk on the assailants, but THAT had my readers at the time staring blankly ahead of them, shouting: DAFUK. So I needed a beginning before that prologue, because when I tried starting straight from the proper first chapter, then my readers went bonkers somewhere in chapter three. WHAT, he's from another world???? So, well :D