Review Detail of Chryiss in Transition and Restart

Overall, this is written well with no glaring mistakes or typos. It’s descriptive enough to make dialogues interesting, and the humor of the characters is a nice touch. The physical settings don’t need a lot of description because it’s basically just a school. The characters aren’t delved into completely, but that’s probably part of the mystery as well as probably due to only having 30 (where I stopped) chapters to introduce many characters. Ryu, Noriko, Christina, Kyoko, Yukio, Ulf. These seem to be the main group plus maybe principal Nakagawa. This isn’t that many characters, but all the name variations made it rather confusing, and it took a while to get used to and sort out who was who. The little clues can be easily missed as this isn’t ****** leisurely reading. I had to focus to catch the hints and piece together the plot and connection of the two worlds. I can imagine without careful reading and digesting, the story could be rather confusing (seeing the comments) due to the mysteriousness of it. My only real suggestion, or just idea rather, is to put the 2040 chaps into one or even cut some of them. A few of them in the middle of the 2016 chapters didn’t shed much light or add to much (or maybe I missed out on the importance completely) to the plot. At least, I didn’t see how they flowed/connected to the 2016 events. It just felt like they cut in the middle of the story events in 2016 where most of my understanding was pieced together from the early happenings in the 2040 or transit station events. I love a good mystery, and this certainly has me guessing and theorizing. I’m personally not all that wild on the school theme since I’ve seen plenty of those variations. Good work, keep at it! (: