Review Detail of Charlotte8 in Transition and Restart

I think your individual chapters work very well, but put together into a narrative, they're a bit disjunct. As several of your other reviewers have said, even with the intro, keeping track of what is going on where with whom in what world is challenging. When so many reviews say the same thing, it's probably time to take a second look at how you're structuring the story. However, the concept of getting to go back and do it over--that's universal and cuts to the core of human nature. I haven't read it to the end, but if you haven't already, working in a chapter or two about their lives when they're fifty and regretful would underscore why they want to go back so very badly. I also like the recurring sakura blossoms. They're a very well thought out touch.