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Villain_Rai
Villain_RaiLv21yr
2023-07-20 03:28

The story is great and all and I also liked the way you used English so clearly , honestly the way of you utilizing English makes me jealous because I am not good at that .The story was too short , this is only my opinion but if the chapter 1 - 4 had been a single chapter since they takes place in class , the chapter would not only be long enough for the readers to be engrossed but also had been a complete episode .I want to write many things but I won't . if you don't mind me then can you send me your Facebook account or something like that where I can talk to you in private chat or something like that ?after all , getting to know another author is extremely advantageous to an author like us .I will be waiting for your id account , I hope you will send it to me .[img=recommend][img=recommend]

Phoenix's flame

Annisax
4.7
13 Chs

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Annisax
AnnisaxAuthor

Nothing to be jealous about 😅 we are all learning

1yr
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Villain_Rai
Villain_RaiLv2

but still, the execution is much refined compared to mine . if I had your level of skill, I would have done much better than now .any way this is also why I wanted to have private conversation with you so to learn many things from you which I lack .

Annisax:Nothing to be jealous about 😅 we are all learning
1yr
Villain_Rai
Villain_RaiLv2

oh , and also please check my [ Criminal Mind ] it has three chapters . I hope you will read and rate it

1yr
Annisax
AnnisaxAuthor

Try to get on discord.My username is Annisax. Then we can talk

Villain_Rai:but still, the execution is much refined compared to mine . if I had your level of skill, I would have done much better than now .any way this is also why I wanted to have private conversation with you so to learn many things from you which I lack .
1yr
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TsukasaFrier
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I love your writing style, its easy to read and enjoyable. As for the plot, the story still in beginning stage so its difficult to give honest review but I think the potential is there. The pacing is good as well!

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mina_jinhoo
mina_jinhooLv2

Even though this story has only about 5 chapters it has already captured my interest.The synopsis alone captured my attention and the first chapter was really interesting. The author has a very interesting idea wile writing this book. The amount of creativity in the book was perfect and the language and pronunciation was on spot. keep up the great work

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femme_fatale
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The story is still in its early stages but I know it's going to be big. It advances interestingly. I would like to suggest that you use "...." for dialogues. It would be easier to read. Overall the story seems really great! Keep up the great work author!

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sleepingpeacefully
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Loved it ,story and writing style is great and loved it so far. Looking forward for more, Keep it up author.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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Adam_Aksara
Adam_AksaraLv3

"Phoenix's Flame" is a captivating teen webnovel that hooks you from the start. The narrative seamlessly blends coming-of-age themes with fantasy elements, resulting in a uniquely riveting tale. The protagonist's journey, much like a phoenix rising, is filled with challenges and growth, offering readers an inspiring narrative. The plot twists are well-executed, and the author's vibrant storytelling brings the world to life. Consistent updates and the author's engagement with readers add to the charm. "Phoenix's Flame" is truly a brilliant, five-star read that resonates with the teen spirit.

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Ninestar619_5803
Ninestar619_5803Lv4

Of all the elements of the story, the writing style was the best... why? cause it makes u feel like u r watching a series rather than reading a fine online book. This book is great and easily flowing. Good job, author

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Theothegiant
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though this story has only about 5 chapters I'm very intrigued by it. The synopsis alone made me want to dive into this book and the first chapter was really interesting. language and pronunciation had no problems at all! keep up!

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Kkomi
KkomiLv11

Your writing style is absolutely wonderful! It feels so natural and easy to read. I love how fast-paced it is; it keeps me engaged, and I never get bored in any of the chapters. While there may be some small punctuation errors, it's still a joy diving into your story.

1yr
ikigai_yugen
ikigai_yugenLv2

Right off the bat, the FL is utterly hilarious 🤣 I honestly couldn't stop laughing after reading the first chapter! The plot seems interesting and a few improvements in punctuation and grammar could make this book pretty hard to put down ^.^ Great job Author ( •̀ ω •́ )✧

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First_Flame
First_FlameLv3

4.6 for me, Sorry I'm not the romantic type of guy so I'll say it from a single person point of view (sad single life) The story is interesting, thou a little faced paced, the characters and well written and the setting in great, the dialogue sometime overlap and there are some grammatical mistakes which we all make (Especially me as English is not my first language) But there is improvement as the story progresses, so keep going and one more thing, the chapters are too short, lol. People need sauce so don't deny them of this privilege.

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