Review Detail of lets_get_this_rice in A Slackers guide to Immortality
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No spoilers here. (Review from chap 20+) So I thought it would be similar to other types of wuxia or martial art novels. But I was damn wrongđ Would consider this a breath of fresh air. Having an Mc who is not all about piercing the heavens or becoming god all the time makes quite the funny thing to read after a while. But even though this novel gave me a good chuckle and a deep laugh, it lacked something. Author, you need to add more of the 'cultivation' themes usually depicted in novels of the same genre's, as it is this which truly makes them stand out. Don't get me wrong, mc is a plus, and I love his original character and the well written story. But you would most definitely come much further with some more plot! ;) this is definitely a good start, and I can see you are very dedicated to your work. Hope to see more from you! Grammar is good, and I didn't break out of immersion too often when reading. You should focus more on having more depth in.each chapter, instead of posting short ones. It will be much more rewarding! (Short chapters are also good, but make sure you also whip them in shape!) Also, author, if you read this then I highly advice you to get a cover photo! :) Will give you a 4.4/5 But Joe is as shameless as myself, so heres a 5/5. All the best! ;)
A Slackers guide to Immortality
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It's easy to walk a path that is clearly marked. I agree that "cultivation" themes aren't too easily found but they are there very subtle but I am working on trying to flesh them out more. The next few chapters in work right now will address them. I just hope that whoever is reading is laughing. The world needs more chuckles. Thanks for the loquacious review that's almost a short story in itself. Honesty much appreciated.
Always welcome! You definitely have a good stance in the comedy aspect. And if laughing is you aimed for, then there isn't a need to worry. However, I was just thinking about appealing to a wider audience. You definitely know how to write smoothly, and I just wanted to try and suggest a way to improve although it may not be the one you are most interested in. Like 'dual cultivation' I don't know if you have read it, but it's what I like to refer to as a "Perfect Combination" of two elements. It had the plot in there, and it has the jokes and the other stuff. Sorry if my review was a little overwhelming on the criticism, should have phrased myself better. But yeah, keep up the good work! ;)
SouthToiletWizard:It's easy to walk a path that is clearly marked. I agree that "cultivation" themes aren't too easily found but they are there very subtle but I am working on trying to flesh them out more. The next few chapters in work right now will address them. I just hope that whoever is reading is laughing. The world needs more chuckles. Thanks for the loquacious review that's almost a short story in itself. Honesty much appreciated.
Don't worry too much about being overly critical, as long as you can speak the truth as you see it then people should be able to respect you for it. The caveat to that is to not turn it into an attack based primarily on feelings. It's not going to appeal to a wide audience as it stands primarily because it's not typical. Joe was forced to become a cultivator but he will always be a slacker. People love reading novels with OP MCs that are either OP because of either insane hard work or they are given advantages from a system that nobody else has. IMO the first path to power is pretty dull. It's been hashed over for idk at least a couple hundred years. You heard the expression practice for 10,000 hours to master a single brush stroke. The other path to power might just be lazy writing IMO. Both are entertaining to read but they are pretty unappealing to me to try to write.
lets_get_this_rice:Always welcome! You definitely have a good stance in the comedy aspect. And if laughing is you aimed for, then there isn't a need to worry. However, I was just thinking about appealing to a wider audience. You definitely know how to write smoothly, and I just wanted to try and suggest a way to improve although it may not be the one you are most interested in. Like 'dual cultivation' I don't know if you have read it, but it's what I like to refer to as a "Perfect Combination" of two elements. It had the plot in there, and it has the jokes and the other stuff. Sorry if my review was a little overwhelming on the criticism, should have phrased myself better. But yeah, keep up the good work! ;)
lets_get_this_rice:Always welcome! You definitely have a good stance in the comedy aspect. And if laughing is you aimed for, then there isn't a need to worry. However, I was just thinking about appealing to a wider audience. You definitely know how to write smoothly, and I just wanted to try and suggest a way to improve although it may not be the one you are most interested in. Like 'dual cultivation' I don't know if you have read it, but it's what I like to refer to as a "Perfect Combination" of two elements. It had the plot in there, and it has the jokes and the other stuff. Sorry if my review was a little overwhelming on the criticism, should have phrased myself better. But yeah, keep up the good work! ;)
lets_get_this_rice:Always welcome! You definitely have a good stance in the comedy aspect. And if laughing is you aimed for, then there isn't a need to worry. However, I was just thinking about appealing to a wider audience. You definitely know how to write smoothly, and I just wanted to try and suggest a way to improve although it may not be the one you are most interested in. Like 'dual cultivation' I don't know if you have read it, but it's what I like to refer to as a "Perfect Combination" of two elements. It had the plot in there, and it has the jokes and the other stuff. Sorry if my review was a little overwhelming on the criticism, should have phrased myself better. But yeah, keep up the good work! ;)
SouthToiletWizard:Why did I get 5 stars now? I thought it was 4.5 before? Must be planet beer can