Review Detail of Beyond_Namez in Martial Spirit World [Old Version]
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Terrible grammar. You need to edit your chapters, Or use a program to fix your grammar mistakes. No real world background. Pheonix empire? Dimension? No world? You said Pheonix Empire is a dimension? Did he destroy the whole Galaxy? Empire? World? The MC has never seen a genius like the one he currently possesses? He comes from a Celestial Empire. Also Is Willow State a villiage? State? City? According to you EVERYONE in Willow State knows him and he is well liked. While being a Mortal. I see that you mentioned that he lived in a City but never said the name of it or anything. You just said he is well liked by everyone in Willow State. Also how did Fenrir know that that was the same guy? If you reincarnate do you keep your old spirit if so how did he get a new one? Also many people don't know the secret of the two boulders but other people also tried it, does it mean they also meet the same spirit " Fenrir "? So just anyone grave robs people even level 7 cultivators lmao. Wang Xue wasn't even a cultivator. Seems like people are suprised over level 7 cultivators. I doubt the genius lover had anything good all they knew was that she had talent. MC breaks his morals and doesn't kill the girl. When did he pay 100 silver? It said that he paid 50 silver? He might be lying though but why would he lie to that girl. Also he let the girl stay in his room so much for a " Loner " " As this happens Wang Xue, who was hailed as the cruelest and bloody person in 3 dimensions. " " Everybody that had lost their lives in that world will not be able to find salvation and go through reincarnation, all of the souls that's present in the dimension when the cataclysm were all shattered whether it be those old monsters or the weak peasants' everyone was the same. " Yet he doesn't kill the girl. " Logic "
Martial Spirit World [Old Version]
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Okay, first thank you for noticing the minute details. I know my grammar is bad, it is not my first language but I will try to improve in order to make a better story. 1. He did pay 50 silvers, but he tricked the girl into giving him money, I thought that I made subtle hints that he lied. 2. It's not that he went back to his morals, he will kill all that he does not like, he just wanted to focus on resolving his problems with the Dragon Pagoda, so if he kills her then he would attract unwanted attention to himself without gaining anything. 3.for the grave robbers, they are simply weak. Most young people the MC came across were as strong or stronger than the two. These are the answers, well he will kill soon when he obtains the strength to fend for himself. Thank you for the honest review, I really appreciate it and gave me the time to reflect on what I am lacking.
Almost forgot, the world background will be put in as the story progress, in my own opinion inserting the whole world background in one chapter may not have a good effect so I will be doing it little by little when the time comes.
FallacyPage:Okay, first thank you for noticing the minute details. I know my grammar is bad, it is not my first language but I will try to improve in order to make a better story. 1. He did pay 50 silvers, but he tricked the girl into giving him money, I thought that I made subtle hints that he lied. 2. It's not that he went back to his morals, he will kill all that he does not like, he just wanted to focus on resolving his problems with the Dragon Pagoda, so if he kills her then he would attract unwanted attention to himself without gaining anything. 3.for the grave robbers, they are simply weak. Most young people the MC came across were as strong or stronger than the two. These are the answers, well he will kill soon when he obtains the strength to fend for himself. Thank you for the honest review, I really appreciate it and gave me the time to reflect on what I am lacking.
Lmao u just figured now and not from the business practices theyve been doing since the website started
Beyond_Namez:Also I noticed something. Qidian is super corrupt lol, They made it so you can't affect the ratings on a Featured novel haha.
Beyond_Namez:Also I noticed something. Qidian is super corrupt lol, They made it so you can't affect the ratings on a Featured novel haha.
Safryu:Lmao u just figured now and not from the business practices theyve been doing since the website started
