Review Detail of Jamison_C in Crimson Love(BL)

Reviewing the latest 3 chapters- would suggest to improve grammer i.e she said, scratching her arm. Readability is fine in general. The sentence below though- what is the main subject? “Father,do you remember Akihito Makoto,the drug dealer?”He questioned. Sentence variety is there and passive voice is kept low. All the best ^^