Your story has drawn me in. Although this is not the genre that I love, but there is potential. Try to write a story with a very smart hero. I think you will be able to write the same story as Reverend Insanity or Warlock of the Magus World.
Tomoyuki
Liked it!
LIKEDon't compare yourself to those legendary authors they also went through hardship but they didn't give up.
Tomoyuki:Uh, thanks. I doubt it, though. I'm nowhere as good as those legendary authors.