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2019-05-04 07:04

The story line is wonderful, superb even addictive sometimes but the major problems were grammatically mistakes, spelling mistakes even sometimes emotional expressions are exaggerated. Shouting and crying and yelling expressions are misplaced. Sometimes u cant tell when a scene ends and another begins. But the author is good when it comes to the plot. Even through all this I still managed to read to the end bcos the story was good.

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