The story line so far is very good, but you need to do some editing and rewriting as readers will be turned off your novel if you continue the way you are, yes it will effect you updating but it will be a better experience for the reader in the future which should be the goal of a writer. To create a beautiful fiction world.
Zehell2218
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LIKEThis is the first original story that i ever liked here in webnovel. The plot and characters are interesting. My only advice though is to find an editor. The storyline is good but I've seen a lot of grammar lapses, especially with the tenses. I meant no offense and I do really like your story. I just wish to see a bit of improvement on the novel's quality as the story progresses. I wish you more power and success!! Great work so far! ššš§”
I agree! Not trying to be rude or anything but the grammar does distract from the storyline and Iām really enjoying the plot but the grammar is getting in the way of that enjoyment. I would go in and comment next to every paragraph that has something that could be improved (now that itās possible) but people get really angry when others try to correct the author and I donāt want the hate.