This review is part of a review swap and valid as of chapter 96. We have some kind of black ops female who's transported to another world, or possibly our own history. It's quite unclear which. After transport she gains the ability to forcefully hypnotize people. The setting she arrives in is an ancient military force with a rather unclear empire attached to it, and I mean in in that order. The initial setting is a beseiged fortress which is on the verge of being overrun while the main character is worried about having her timely bath and a decent meal. In the end it does get overrun. Worry not, the cavalry arrives like in some old B-western movie and the fortress is saved. For absolutely no reaon at all the entire cast is relocated to some diffuse elsewhere since a fortress worth attacking apparently isn't worth manning after a succesful defence. The second arc of the story is an endless infodump delivered in the form of dialogue while the reader slowly is fed hints that this might also be a reverse harem. The last twenty chapters published this far revolves around some assassination attempt which devolves into a prison break. Did I mention that this story is labelled as romance? Now for the stars. Writing: Two stars. The English used is subpar to the degree that it acts as an efficient wall preventing the reader from accessing the story. Tenses are all over the place, and while there seems to be a point of view I honestly can't guess which. Third person anyway. Words are ususally spelled correctly, which would have been fine if they were actually the words that were supposed to go into that slot in the sentence. Updates: Five stars. Solid. Story: Three stars. Well, there's a plot going somewhere. It's thoroughly broken by multiple chapters of infodumping inserted randomly, and there's very little logical coherence between arcs. But it's still definitely going somewhere. Characters: Two stars. They have names, which is good. Apart from the main characters I desperately need those names, or I would have no idea about who's doing what. Our female main character is the only one with a personality. World: Four stars. In this case it's actually not praise. There's huge and massive amounts of world background, and it all comes as endless dialogues hiding the infodumps. Well over a fourth of the content is world background, and it's delivered with the elegance of a gorilla going berserk in a high class restaurant. But, in the end, there's lots and lots and lots of world background. Lastly, this story desperately needs an editor, and given the 96 chapters published I'm not convinced about the romance label.
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Yeah, i also think the author shouldn't rush any romantic or 'hints' of romance in their. It wouldn't look good because the second prince has a dead wife he's mourning over plus a kid he has. I personally don't like him😒, she can find much better guy's, there are many fish in the sea.💁
Well I can understand y'all view point, but after the first couple of chapters and you realize you dont like the story or whatever, then just don't read it. Also the author already clearly stated that English is not their first language. Its not their fault there are some grammatical errors, and I'm sure you understand that as well, everyone makes mistakes.
You might want to clear the background for the review before you spew out something inane like this. I explicitly asked the author if I should proceed with the review before writing it since there were problems with the content.
Child, look, if the author can't take a bad review then they won't survive in the industry. Everyone needs constructive criticism (i.e. Bad reviews) too! That's the only way future readers will get a broad perspective of the book rather than just one biased view of "ooh such a great book" 🙄
Is 'infodump', like sudden information 'dumped' by the author? I really like your review since it is very detailed.. but I don't understand what 'infodump' means... This commoner needs clarification! #^#
'Infodump' means pumping out more or less raw data. When that happens in a story the result is exposition of an encyclopediac character during which nothing happens.
Thanks for the info! Truly appreciate it ^•^
@StenDuring: Just curious. Given your initial impression, have you decided to read the whole thing? Has anything changed with your impression afterwards? I haven't started reading yet. I'm still thinking about it
@StenDuring: Just curious. Given your initial impression, have you decided to read the whole thing? Has anything changed with your impression afterwards? I haven't started reading yet. I'm still thinking about it
It's been a long time since I wrote this review. At that time the written langauge turned out to be a deal breaker for me. I haven't returned since, and given a proper edit the contents of my review may very well no longer be correct.
