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PurplePoohBearLv154yrPurplePoohBear

The characters are not well developed because the author spends too much time on legal procedures and repetitive descriptions, while ignoring the inner life that is supposed to be developing in and between the characters. The author doesn't use foreshadowing very well. While I can tell Spellcheck has been used, it is obvious that no one is reading through to make sure that the words used are the correct words that the author intended, which I find surprising for someone who is a lawyer (author). I made it to chapter 111 and couldn't take it anymore. I don't know why this was pick as a premium title. Don't waste your power stones, imho.

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Thank you for taking the time to write a review. While I can understand your disappointment about locked chapters and the novel going premium much of the issues you comment on are addressed as the story goes on. Your feedback as to issues however will be taken on board.

PurplePoohBear
PurplePoohBearLv15PurplePoohBear

At the time, I had a subscription, so locked chapters were never my issue. I do know that is an issue for others, thus my last comment. You're not a bad writer and all of the issues that I brought up will get better the more you write. I thought you're plot was well thought out and original (yes, even in a sea of 'flash marriage' novels). You managed to bring a fresh outlook to an old plot device. The bones of the characters were there, which was why I was so disappointed when they weren't fleshing out well as the story played out. The choice to make the protagonist Australian really helped show the differences and similarities in cultures. I also appreciated your approach to spousal abuse. Too often romance novels treat this subject lightly and, I think, these misconceptions lead to a larger problem for young women. Keep writing. You have good ideas.