Review Detail of Immortal_Potato in dropped, continued by the name Journey towards greatness.

I have read the first chapter. The author’s first sentence is an extreme run on sentence so I have to give him 1 star for writing quality. Commas are not replacements for periods. Please consider editing the story. The updates on the book are quite stable so I gave him 4 stars for update stability. The story development is pretty bad but I was lenient and gave the author 3 stars. The character is absolutely terrible. The author has clearly never seen or heard a war vet and it is inexcusable to call him a war vet but also make him a teenage harem master in terms of personality. The author has never heard of “show not tell”, he just tells us what the character is supposed to be and never backs it up with actions. I have to give world background 1 star as the author didn’t really expand on the Pokémon Universe.