Review Detail of Author_Shizu in The Madness Within

Well first of all I'm not a big fan of first person point of view. And here on webnovel I've mostly seen third person point of view so you better change that. Second try to put information about the world in small paragraphs than long continuous one. They get boring. You should rather start with dialogues and reveal the world in them slowly as it is more exciting that way. Your English is fine but just try a little-you can make it better. And I suggest you to do some reading of the translated popular novels before attempting to write one. That's my honest review.