Review Detail of CreamAndCookies in The Union

Is this a pre written story? From the amount you're releasing and the length of the chapters I hope so. There are a lot of small errors so far. If you have the capability I'd suggest having it read back to you, I have my tablet read mine back to me, it's bad at it, but I hear a lot of things my eyes skip over because I know what it should say. Consider using the timer and releasing a chapter a day? I like it in general, but I want to have read more than a handful of chapters before writing a review. Luck.

It was. But now I'm only seven chapters ahead. About the release rate and timer, I'm still testing the waters. I can currently write several chapters a day, but that's because I'm on vacation. I'm going back to work next week so my writing speed will return to normal. My goal is to release at least one chapter a day because this novel will be a long one. Also thank you for your suggestion. I copyread every chapter before releasing them, but there are still grammatical and clerical errors. I'll try it.

Your new cover is very nice.

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Is the MC strong? Cause I hate reading novels where the MC is weak. Though I'm fine with him starting out weak but grows strong or OP.( I haven't read the novel, but thinking of putting it on my reading list)

Your novel is so interesting...

So far the only thing in your world that feels odd to me is the rate at which people die in encounters War is fast and messy in direct confrontation what draws it out is travel, waiting to fight, scouting the area etc In direct confrontation hundreds of people can die in the matter of seconds. Especially in say a cavalry charge to the rear On wrong move, step, reaction, thought could get someone killed Love the story overall but its something I noticed in one of the big fights.

I like your novel...keep going....so for read your story I remake the map for castonia... I am a newbie doing map...https://ibb.co/KNxgdVp

Thank you so much! I am honored for your effort. I will include this in my author's thought for the next chapter.

Your novel is a good read and your characters are very likeable. Still, as I am a true fan of RTW, I need to ask an urgent question: Do you inted to impart witches or at least some magic in the later chapters? It's something my heart yearns for and I would really love to see (at least) a hint of supernatural powers and the likes in your novel. (I am still reading the early chapters, therefore the question) Thx and keep up the good work 😊

There is magic but scant. No, there won't be witches although there is something kind of similar. This is a low fantasy novel and focuses more in the politics.

There is magic but scant. No, there won't be witches although there is something kind of similar. This is a low fantasy novel and focuses more in the politics.

Thx for info. 👍🏻

Author no lie I haven’t played the game darksouls but I at first thought the cover was the cursed knight with angel wings until I realized that the firekeeper holding him but her hair made it look like angel wings even with her clothing and mask.

Hello, it has been 10 months since you're announcement of writing a full novel. I have been looking forward to it, though it seems a tad hopeless at this point. Do you have an update? Thank you in advance.

Not good. I'm maybe at 25 percent. It will take maybe 8 more months or so. The problem is the five-month writers block I had. But the story is shaping nicely. It is about a loyal royal guard who lost his king. There will no magic and tons of politics so I'm worried it will be boring for some readers. When it's done, I will be using this platform to have alpha readers screen mistakes and typos and grammar issues. Thank you for asking. It means a lot knowing there are people looking forward to my work. Writing is lonely sometimes.

Good to hear, as long as it's coming. On another note, you don't need to worry about no magic - no readers, as long as the politics, army building, military aspects are interesting and well done you'll have a solid demographic of people reading regardless. I don't really want you to give away anything here, but can you say what personality the MC will have or is it too much of a giveaway? To clarify, is he evil, anti-hero, neutral, all for justice? Thank you in advance.

*I forgot to mention, case and point is Black Iron's Glory about the no magic - no viewers thing. Wish you luck.

There are three protagonists. The first one, he is a veteran royal guard who has high regard for justice. In fact, he is blinded by it, a slave by it, and that is his flaw. He suffers from PTSD from failing his duty. The second one is an actual slave. He is a coward and selfish, like what you would expect from someone who was denied of basic human rights his entire life. The third is sweet girl who was forced to do evil things to protect her family.