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VeloxAeterno
VeloxAeternoLv25yr
2019-09-12 03:04

A critical review here, coming from great books like the Song of Ice and Fire series (Game of Thrones books) and Tom Clancy books, this webnovel has a good plot HOWEVER it lacks intricate details throughout the book. Its basically like reading a summary of a book or just reading the MOST important parts of a plot/story but you almost barely read parts about the day to day or the more deep details to flesh out its writing.

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VeloxAeterno
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In short, its basically not too fleshed out in detail but the plot is good. However, it must be emphasized that it really lacks fleshing out. Like watching a compressed anime from a huge manga

CreamAndCookies
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Sadly I agree. I relied more in telling rather than showing and I am guilty of using dialogue as exposition. But then again, going through the entire plot thoroughly would extend the novel at least 300 more chapters and I don't have the energy for that. I cringe everytime I read earlier and even later chapters. Thank you. Really. Webnovels need more proper reviews to improve their quality.

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