Catching the women of yun che is not cool, Especially princess who has nothing special. The biggest mistake of the fanfic is to go after all the women of the yunche. In my opinion he should go after the lineage and the 7 ice fairies. As he has the system he can improve everybody's lineage. But this MC is very dumb and thinks about fucking the original MC. Another blatant mistake is the cultivation of the fairies which were all realm of the sky. And to make matters worse after receiving lineage she had to go straight to sovereign but that did not happen. For the fanfic to be good can not coil because people end up abandoning, have to be faster and cut the coil. It should be a little innovative.
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