Writing was kinda messy, needs a little bit improvement. I suggest you read a lot of english novels to help you out. It was quite confusing but the plot was alright. overall, it was alright aside from the writing. Keep it up author! :D

I just want to point out that the way the sentences are structured and the conflict is introduced, I feel like this was written by not only someone who doesn’t know English too well, but a young person. A few mistakes is one thing, but it’s to the point where you can’t pick out the author’s tone and voice. Dear author, if you want to fix this, running your chapters through a grammar and spellchecker you can find online should help put you in the right direction. There’s a lot of updates and the story seems to have a firm plot, and in that regard I encourage them to keep writing. I’m just doing my part to give an honest review so the higher quality stories I want to read on Webnovel get the credit they deserve. Please don’t take this as discouragement.

I could see the author is really trying his/her best for this story. According to your ID, It's obvious you aren't from an English country, so I'm not gonna say much. I could tell where you're driving at with the plot, but really hope you could get hold of an editor. It's a catchy title, genre and plot (based on my understanding) Fighting!! wish u goodluck!

The story design is compelling and upto the standards of fantasy genre. The main character is well built with a flaw to overcome and to grow strong. Little editing is needed to fix the grammatical errors because it is bringing down the whole thing. Hope you find an editor soon and it's a good effort. Don't stop writing and update asap. ❤Good luck.

The storyline is good but you definitely need to work on your punctuation and grammar man! It brings down the whole plot! And do work on that synopsis! It isn't elaborated enough.

You have great idea on the storyline, but you may want to find an editor to make your whole packaging a little better. Keep up the good work!

The writing really needs a lot of improvement. For a fantasy story like this, if the writing is not good, then the readers will not enjoy it. I would suggest you to get it edited by an English expert. The story is interesting and imaginative. Just try harder and you'll get there :)

The story is nice, but it would be better if author can improve the writing. Sometimes, I'm confused with who say what. I also had a hard time understanding the story until I read it several times more.

It would be cool if the author would work with editing the novel. Other than that, the novel has a quite decent plot and keep up with it! 😄😄

Its a great story with lot of potential but the author needed to Polish its narration and sentence flow. It has more than 200 chapters and if author go through some effort and venture through the stories of some learned authors, it will greatly enlighten the author. Goodluck author. I know once you settle what the story lack, you'll definitely find bigger response from the readers.