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Elfrit
ElfritLv134yr
2021-03-10 00:23

So far the book is awesome, really loved the FL being strong again in life and not losing her footing and ML is kind of sweet. Honestly my most favorite characters are Neil and Ru

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The MC, ML and Ru are just wonderful. And the brothers are great. This story has loads of potential, it's just that it feels like it need sto be fleshed out more. The bones are solid and it has so much to work with. It just feels a little flat. Not enough descriptions and depth with situations. Like the Ex wife's obsessive love. It felt a little out of left field. The only introduction we had to her was that she was a bad person. It wasn't until later that the crazy was released. I wish that when they had discussed her earlier, a bit more of that had been brought up so you could see why she did what she did. Instead of finding out why as it happened. There were no clues before hand to help bring some focus. That is just an example of where I want some more descriptive details. I just want more. It feels like it was edited a little more than it should have been almost? If that makes sense. There are some grammatical errors and some parts that seem incomplete. As if the end of a sentence wasn't included. This story has so much going for it. The fact that even with the problems I have, I still want to keep reading shows that the Author is doing a wonderful job. This is a solid story with great characters. If there were a few more details and each chapter was even just 100-200 words longer (which would cover the added content) this could really be something special. It's a B work from an A student. You know they can get it there with just a little more work. Am looking forward to seeing where the story goes and if after it's completed and if it did get a bit more fleshed out, I would buy this as a kindle book or a pdf, etc. And would also reread it.

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