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Lastear
LastearLv156yr
2019-01-12 12:30

This is great, so much better than I was expecting. And the author has good grammar to boot. I love the humor and how it keeps catching me off guard somehow. I how it goes on to be a long series.

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*hope it goes on to be a long series.

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KingGrizzly
KingGrizzlyLv10

The story is great and the only real key problems of it are the way it's written, character and religion. While there's nothing wrong with it at first glance, but eventually the way it's written is exhausting to read, it feels like a chor and I have to find the really important parts through all the text, not at all the same as the first chapter as when it was funny. The story is very similar to "Dragonborn Saga", great novel btw, has a few bad moments but if you stick through it, the story eventually gets better. The only real problematic character is the MC. He's a funny dude, but if it was the real world I really would want to punch his teeth out cause he sounds and is annoying. It was funny to see it from his perspective and then from others perspective (Listening to the story from others barely happens) but then all you read is just useless nonsense and rambling that just bores you. He also has the most annoying character trait in my opinion. He cants accept reality. I don't mind if he does it once or twice, but the dude won't stop, it's like he expects the world to be molded to his desire and perspective, which is as annoying as when taking care of a spoiled kid. The author also screwed up in character tropes as well. The entire cast is either idiots, fanatics, the most eccentric character you have ever seen and the most eccentric to rule them all. It makes the dialogue hard to read and makes one want to gouge out their eyes. Religion in stories always makes me feel uncomfortable. Especially the MC's religion. The MC's religion is very familiar to Christianity when it was in its crusading days, and in case you didn't know, in those days, it was normal to kill/r@pe all the "heathens" (Jewish People). That is exactly what Religion the MC has made but it dedicates itself to catgirls, he always mentions purging and crusading in the chapters that I'm at and to be totally honest, kinda disgusts me, the fact that he dedicates his religion to catgirls instead of some higher being really makes me hate him as a character as I feel like he is just toying with lives. I feel like this story had a good premise, but is ruined due to not enough careful planning and no real end goal for when the story ends as the author keeps on adding information as the chapters go on. Overall good story, just crazy MC ruins it once it gets into the later chapters in my opinion. Please read the story first as you may like it and MY OPINION might make you have a bad opinion as I didn't talk about the good points in detail. P.S. I initially wrote, "Religion in stories always makes me feel comfortable", imagine how bad that would have been if I posted as is without re-reading. Remember kids! Always double check your work!

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