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Kristina_Lane
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2020-01-08 00:00

I'm sorry but the writing is all choppy and my brain hurts from trying to read this. I really wanted to read this I made it to chapter 10 but can't continue on any further. It seems like it could be am amazing story if the author takes the time to proof read before posting.

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nobodys_angel
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Thank you for your review ,I am an immature writer with poor english , I am trying my best to develop it,and again I am sorry for my mistakes 😊😊😊😊

Kristina_Lane
Kristina_LaneLv10

I'm not try to be over critical. I don't mean too offend you!! Overall I love the story idea and am obessed with the characters!!!! But I suffer from dyslexia and it makes it harder to read.

nobodys_angel:Thank you for your review ,I am an immature writer with poor english , I am trying my best to develop it,and again I am sorry for my mistakes 😊😊😊😊
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