Review Detail of Raiohosore in Undying Will

Ok

I think u should rewrite, make no mistake, u work isnt ****, its interesting but damn man, some **** be confusing and a bit senseless, and the English and structure. many of the reviews mention whats wrong[other than the retarded ones, ignore em]... So yah,maybe re-write?, like from a fresh slate, and if u do, post this in the FF genre..eitherway GL....u got something interesting but hard to read

can u tell me who is the love interest. I always wanna know that before reading a fanfic